So... I'm trying my hand at writing Cartoons

I haven't written much the past couple of weeks, the past two months actually, so it would be save to say that I might be a little rusty. You could take that as an excuse but the truth is, I never really felt writing Comedy was my thing, so now I'm trying. As always with my writing, there is a bigger message behind this one, and if you think about it it I'm sure you'll get it. :) Read it and Tell me what you think.


Bruce's adventures in some random tropical Island Episode #4 ( Actually this probably won't be the name, but I can't think of anything ;) )


EXT. In the Jungle. A Happy Sunny day.

Panel 1

Art: BRUCE ( who looks like a Toucan ) is standing, with one knee bending back, so he has his foot on the tree behind it. He's chewing bubble gum. His facial expression is pretty blank, and he has earphones on he is looking at TRUMPINA an Old elephant who is walking, she is on the left of the panel almost gone. Her Wallet is falling, she's on a walker, being too Old and too heavy she can no longer walk.

Bruce: Yo Excuse me, you dropped your wallet ma'am.

Panel 2

Art: A mid shot of Trumpina looking back over her shoulder, she is speaking and looks happy.

Trumpina: Why Thank you Sonny.

Panel 3

Art: Back to a shot similar to the first one where you can see the all the characters, Trumpina, is still looking at Bruce, who hasn't moved and is looking the other direction.

Trumpina: Excuse me, aren't you going to get that for me?

Panel 4

Art: Bruce is looking at her, still with a blank expression on his face. Trumpina on the other hand is surprised. Bruce is speaking.

Bruce: psssh People, always wanting everything handed to them.